Hey Amita!! Thank you for sharing.
I have a couple of suggestions.
I would change completely the first paragraph. It seems when I read it that "we live oppressed by men" and we definitely don't want to send that message. I wouldn't feel comfortable saying that we need to stand up because numbers or because reasons that somehow might give the sense that we are being oppressed. It's like saying that we need to polish the world to be part of it, and that's far from true. I wouldn't also use the term "poor" since we do have girls that don't have any contact with technology in regular environments. And last (and I know it won't like many) I won't like to use the term feminist, we are here to help people (in this case Women) to join us, not to create a movement to defend women's rights, there are other places to do so; our task should be merely informative and educative. We are helping people to learn about Fedora and use it for good.
Instead, I would start the abstract saying something like: (using mostly of what Amita wrote)
"It's wonderful to be a women.
Women have been participating in social, political, economic, cultural and technological fields for many decades and it's time to push it farther.
Even if Fedora has a raising number of females participating actively in our community, we aim to increase this statistics by creating and encouraging programs where Women interested in IT can develop their personal and technical skills and make a path for themselves in the IT field.
Every tiny step counts, like provide workshops for schoolgirls in areas with difficulties, reaching out to college girls to spread knowledge and opportunities about open source, educating them about Ada Initiative, the GNOME Project’s Outreach Program for Women, OpenHatch and Women in Drupal, pyladies, GSOC. There are so many nice outreach programs for women in open source, we just need to spread the knowledge and motivate every women out there to join the movement. There are lots of things to do, it is not just coding in fact, you can do many different plus exciting things in open source i.e. writing, documentation, designing, translation, testing etc.
Our idea is to make a helping-pyramid where each Fedora Woman can be the mentor of 2 more Women, once these new feel comfortable enough, each one will take 2 more Females, and continue the work to make our numbers grow."
Let me know what you think and if the input was helpful at all :)
Keep the great work Amita!