[Marketing] Re: [Magazine] Pending review: "Fedora teaches future makers in school"

On Thu, May 05, 2016 at 04:16:18PM +0530, beta tester wrote: I've been thinking about doing that, but general guidelines for good writing apply universally. Strunk and White is a good place to start. Here are some of my observations where we can improve writing in the Magazine: * Avoid passive voice, which unnecessarily lengthens sentences and is harder to read. NOT AS GOOD: A new release of the Firefox package was made by the maintainers last week. BETTER: Maintainers made a new Firefox release last week. * Avoid gerunds -- words that end with "-ing." They are often signs of a weak or passive voice, and they decrease readability. Reformulate the sentence. NOT AS GOOD: The resolution is aiming to decrease the time between security updates. BETTER: The resolution aims to decrease the time between security updates. * Shorter sentences are easier to read. Avoid long compound sentences where possible. * Shorter words are easier to read. Avoid big words where a smaller one is just as effective. * Brevity is great, but clarity is fabulous. -- Paul W. Frields http://paul.frields.org/ gpg fingerprint: 3DA6 A0AC 6D58 FEC4 0233 5906 ACDB C937 BD11 3717 http://redhat.com/ - - - - http://pfrields.fedorapeople.org/ The open source story continues to grow: http://opensource.com