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Hi everyone,
Here are some draft notes I prepared to try to help our marketing team
build up some release notes and press material on the Fedora Workstation
release.
Already sent it to the Working Group members, but I thought I send it out to
these two
lists for further review and suggestions.
Christian
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Fedora Workstation Marketing
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Improvements to the Terminal application
We want to make sure developers have a great experience and we do know that a
strong
terminal application is a core part of that. Due to this we have worked to
integrate
a set of new features in the terminal like support for transparent
backgrounds, automatic
title updates which will make identifying different terminals easier, allow
you do easily
toggle all system keybindings on and off in the terminal and in the GNOME
desktop overview
you can search for terminal running processes by name.
That last sentence's construct is horrible. I thought we could turn off system
keybindings from gnome-shell's overview, and then not.
<snip>
HiDPI Support
Technology never stands still and as a software developer you are used to
using the best technology available.
Which is why we have spent a lot of time and effort on making sure that we
support the new
generation of HiDPI displays well. Phoronix recently called our desktop the
best of HiDPI.
Could we avoid mentioning Phoronix by name? It's not a website I'd like Fedora
Workstation to be associated with.
Exciting roadmap
This Fedora Workstaiton release is not the end, it is the beginning of a new
Workstation.
era for Fedora on the desktop. We have an
exciting roadmap lined up aiming to bring a range of exciting new
technologies to the linux desktop like containers,
smarter virtual machines, better development tools, more web integration and
so on. So if you want to be part of the
future of the linux desktop be sure to get on board now!
I'd say:
Shorter sentences, more commas, and more bullet points.
The GNOME release notes and the OSX feature lists on Apple's website are good
examples
of how to list features without overwhelming users:
https://help.gnome.org/misc/release-notes/3.12/
http://www.apple.com/osx/whats-new/features.html
Cheers